Poem - feedback please?

You must be far younger than the other poets I read on yahoo answers, a practice I'm stopping this instant. But you have incredible potential!! Thank God. I was just going to start drinking from all the bad "poetry" here. The poem is a decent first draft with some very effective imagery and you took chances on it's form. I liked that. But that is just my opinion. I'd like to give you a link. Sign up for LEGITIMATE, EXCELLENT writers groups on line, and I'm positive I'll be buying your book one day. There are plenty of fakes out there that just pat everyone on the back and do not challenge the writer. Don't waste your time there, and don't give up if you get beat up on the good sites. You'll need the thick skin and guidance! Keep writing!